Let's keep practicing with the technology so we become comfortable with this process. You all showed me that you understand how to write a thesis. I saw some confusion with evidence. Remember to choose the best quote that proves your statement. On Monday, in our Socratic Seminar, we focused on providing evidence. In this week's blog, please provide a thesis and two pieces of evidence from the article "Life in the USA: Finding a Job" by Elizabeth Claire.
Are people who are comfortable with technology more successful in finding a job?
I strongly agree that people who are comfortable whit techonology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with techonology in being successful in finding a job. On page 9, paragraph 4,the text says, "Yo can find templates for resumes in most word processing programs or on the internet." On page 10, paragraph 7, the text says, " The are internet sites that offer." "Free resume wriiting." some sites are scam.
ReplyDeleteMy friend May Furtado,you thisis is better and you evidence is good, you have transition and yuo want remember that,you want use frist and second.
DeleteI think how people with technology have on advantage over those who are uncofortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. ''On page 10,paragrapf 7,create a separe resume for posting on the internet ''.''On page 10 paragrapf 5 your resume . spell check is not enouth,it should have no spelling punctuation ,or gramatical erros..
ReplyDeleteMy friend Baptista your thesis is not clear. Next you need to use transition words, example, first, also... You need to put quotation marks just around the words from the text. Your evidence is good and internet and spell check are good examples of technology. Don't forget to use one space between words and 2 spaces after the period.
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Miss Torii
I think people who are comfortable with teghnology be successful in finding a job, First in page 9 paragraph 4. "The text says You can find Templates for resumen in most word processing programs or on the internet", also in page 10 paragraph 8. "Be sure your business email address sounds professional and is easy to remember.
ReplyDeleteI think that people who are confortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job,because the text says,"you can find templantes for resumes in most word processing programs or on the Internet."On page 9, paragraph 4.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Paula, your thesis is great, and you have an good evidence but no the best, because you do not have transition words for example first, second in your evidence, and next time do not forget to used 2 spaces after the period. Godd job.
DeleteMy friend Paula depina your thesis is not clear. Nex you need use transiton words example first socond also . your evidence is good .
Deletei agree people who are confortable with technology have an advantage in being succesful in finding job. because beause the text say."resume can be printed on plain white copy paper.If your are applying for a professional job, use a heavier high-quality paper." my exemple is on page 10,paragraph 2.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Garensha your Thesis is not clear. next you need to use a transition word for example first or second and also. you have a nice evidence with the text. you need to use the space and the capital letters and after two space you need to put the periode.
DeleteMy friend Garensha your thesis is not clear. next you need to use transition words for example first, second and also. your evidence does talking about internet. He talking about detail.
DeleteHi Beny and Patrick,
DeleteWhy is the thesis not clear? Did Garensha state his position?
Miss Torii
Hi Torii because he doesn't use the capital letter at the begining and he dont leave the two space after a period.
DeleteI thin that people who are confortable with technology have an advantage over those who are unconfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. First on page 9, paragraph 4, the text says,'' you can find templates for resumes on the internet. Second on page 10, paragraph 6, the text says,'' create a separate resume for posting on the internet.
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DeleteYour have a good thesis. Your also used a transition word example" first and second". Your evidence one and two are good your templates for resumes to create a separate resume for posting on the internet are example for technology.
I agree people who are confortable with technology have an advantage in being succesful in finding a job. the test said''resume be printed on plain white copy paper. If you are applying for a professional job ''
ReplyDeleteMy friend Dania your thesis is good. next your need to use transition words example first,second,and also. you need to put what paragraph you look for and you not finish your second evident.your evident does talking about in
Deleteernet. He talking about detail.
stanley joseph
My Dania I agree that I may request that papers who technology.
Deletemy frend dania, your thesis is great, but remember you have to use transitation words. and your evidence have to esplain in details about technology
Deletejose
My frend dania, your thesis is good. next you need to use transitation words example first, second,and also your evident does talking about internet. He talking detail.
DeleteI also sgrre with you
DeleteMy friend Dania you have good thesis. you need to use the transition word. for example firt,second,also. next you need to say what paragraph you looking for. your evidence does talking about technology. you talking about detail. you not finish you second evidence. Rossy Baez
DeleteMy friend Dania you have a good thesis.first you need to use transition word. for example first,next,also. next you need to says what paragraphy you looking for. you have good quotation mark. your evidence doesn't talking about technology. you talking about detail. you not finish second evidence. samuel cardoso
DeleteI think people who are comfortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. first, on page 9 paragraph 6 it says" Boldface* your headings*. or write them in all capital letters. Indent* the rest of the text so the headings stand out. write short sentence. leave a space between topics*. second, on page 10 paragraph 3 it says Edit* your resume. spell check* is not enough it should have no spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors. have a teacher or friend read your resume and suggest ways to make it better.
ReplyDeleteDear:Stanley joseph
Deleteyou have a good thesis,the transition words are used . also your evidence is excellent,because talking about the technology.
I think people who are comfortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. on the text says you can find the Templates for resumes in most word processing programs or the internet."on page 9 paragraph 4. and on page 9 paragraph 7. write a short sentence. leave a space between topic.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Benymx ur thesis is great and ur evidence one is great,for the evidence 2 you need more evidence and you dont have transition you need to show ur transition.
DeleteI agree people who one comfatable with technology have an advantage in be succesful in fighting job.
ReplyDeleteMy friend loai if I'm very agree with you because in the future we must be exiton.
DeleteI think people are comfortable the tecnology it,s a good way to find a job and very import to get your advantage.
ReplyDeletemy friend sagrario Infante your thesis is not clear.Next you need to use transition.
DeleteI strongly agree the people who know technology have an advantaje over those who do not know technology in being succeful in finding a job. you can find templates for resumes on the internet.
ReplyDeletedear:jose you have a good thesis. you only have use one line. you dont use transition work.
DeleteI think people who are comfortable with technogy in being successful in finding a job.first, "on page 10 parragraph 4 text says,;Is not enough it should have no spelling punctuation orgrammatica, errors."On page 10 and parragraph 6. create a separate resume for posting on the internet it should not have your address or telephone number or any
ReplyDeleteI think thought that is not a very clear expression she had spoken Because if I agree or desagree was.
DeleteI think that people who know technology is a better way to improve themself in the society. " Because when you go to appy a job they give you a email. they say fill up the application."
ReplyDeletemy friend Sanon the thesis is not claer. next you need to use transition words for example first and second. next you need to put what paragraph you looking for. you does finish your second evidence. your evidence does talking about internet. He talking about detail.
DeleteMrs sanon thesis is not good because put socity you don't surpose to used this word nest thing u don't used transition word, and u don't give referanse about the text says is reason your evidense is not good my freind. that's me jean c. clervilus ur classmate.
DeleteI think that people who are comfortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in finding job. Because the text says on page 9, paragraph 5 to organize your resume you have to put the most important items. Boldface your headings or whrite them in all capital letters, indent the rest of the text.
ReplyDeleteit also says on the same page paragraph 3 that a resume should give your qualifications and experience. it should be brief. I think that if you are uncomfortable with technology,you wont be able to do all this stuff.
people who are confortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncorfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job"on page 10 paragraph 7 the text says,set up a special email adrres to receive responses... , also in page 11 paragraph 1 the text says,think about the message employers will hear if they call you and get your voice mail... ex:this is andrei shurim i'm sorry i missed your call... .
ReplyDeleteI thing when some one are comfortable with techonology with other persone don't comfortable with the techonology. " one page 9 paragraph 4 the text says,you can findtemplates for the successful in most word prodessing programe onthe internet ." one page 10 paragraph 6 the says, create a separate resume for posting on the internet".
ReplyDeleteI think people who are comfortable with technology have advantage in being successful. On page 9 paragraph 3, the text says" you can find templattes for resume in most word processing programs on the internet.
ReplyDeletedear Charlessaint Leande your thesis is hary good. You have evidence is perfect..You don't have transition words.
DeleteI strongly agree that people who know technology have an advantage over those who do not know technology in being sucessful in finding a job. first On page 9, paragraph 4, the text says, " you can find templates for resumes on the internet". Second on page 10, paragraph 6, the text says," create a separate resume for posting on the internet". This means that the resume is very important for get a job.
ReplyDeleteMy friend ceila your thesis is clear. I think you have a good evidence, and transition words.You need to use one space between words and 2 spaces after the period.
DeleteMy friend Ceila Garcia did a great work because her thesis it's good she use the transition on the first evidence then she use the quotion marks also her second evidence she's doing the same thing and end I appreciate her analyse. Great work my friend Ceila.
DeleteI think people who are comfortable with technology have an advantage in being successful in finding job. First "on page 9, paragraph 4, the text says you can find templates for resume on the internet" Second "on page 10, paragraph 6, the text says create a separate resume for posting on the internet".
ReplyDeleteMy friend Hans your thesis is not complete. your evidence is great you use the transition words and the quotion marks, also your evidence is supporting your thesis. I liked very much. good job Hans.
DeleteHi Celia
DeleteWhy isnt the thesis complete? Does he state his position?
Miss Torii
I think people who are comfortable with technology have an avantage over who are with technology in being successful in finding a job. first on page 9 paragraph 4 it says" can find templates for resume on the internet. second on page 10 paragraph 6 it says create a separate resume for posting on the internet".
ReplyDeleteMy friend Patrick, you did a nice work your thesis are good. And also your evidence are good you gave a clue to support your thesis.
DeleteI think people who are comfortable with technology chave an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. first on page 9 paragraph 4 it says" you can find templates for resume on the internet. second on page 10 paragraph 6 it says" create a separate resume for posting on the internet".
ReplyDeleteDear Kimberlie,
DeleteYou have a good thesis. It is one sentence. You also used transition words, example: First and Second. Your evidence one and two are good finding templates and posting on the internet are examples of technology.
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I strongly agree people who are comfortable with technology have an advantage over those who are uncomfortable with technology in being successful in finding a job. First, on page 9 paragraph 4 the text says, " You can process information on the internet." Also, on page 10, paragraph 6, the text syas" create a seperate resume for posting on the internet. This means, if you know technology like using the internet and how to type a resume you will be more successful in finding a job.
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