In reading the blogs from Obama and Jobs, I can see a lot of progress! First, in terms of using thesis and evidence, both in giving relevant and in some cases best evidence and in citation (saying the page, paragraph, etc) . Also, you showed me you are more comfortable with technology. ( A SPECIAL THANK YOU to all the students who helped the new students get gmail accounts and show them the blogging process!!!!) WEPA! In addition, it was fun to see your comments to your peers, even across classes. Nice.
This week as we blog about the biography Martin Luther King, Jr. , by Terry Barber, we are going to practice the skills we already know as well as, try to understand the important role that analysis plays in providing a strong evidence-based argument. Remember, there is no correct answer; rather the best answer is based on the strength of the argument (Thesis, Evidence, Analysis and Concluding Statement). Finally, I saw that we are not all using transition words, remember to do that as you introduce your evidence.
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Miss Torii
Based on the biography, Martin Luther King, Jr. by Terry Barber, what does the author reveal about the protagonist's character?
Based on the biography, MLK by Torry Barber, the author reveals MLK to be a smart. First, on page 17, paragraph 1, the text says, " king is very smart. He goes to school. He gets his Ph.D." This means everyone go to school and get the Ph.D for many years is smart. Next, on page 21, paragraph 1, the text says, " king prenches at a Baptist church. His church is always full... King's sermons give people hope." I think when a people know to epeak, know how to do a person fell good, this people is very smart. In summary, this shows King is smart.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Mary, your thesis, evidence and analysis is great, and you have an good analysis because you have transition words for example first, next and in summary in your work. and you used 2 spaces after the period, quotation words, and your analysis is very good. Excellent job Mary
DeleteMy friend ceila you have a good thesi evidence and analysis,you use transitions words for example first,second and summary in you job,i so happy because you job is very good et complete.
DeleteBased on the biography, MLK by Terry Barber, the author reveals MLK to be a smart. First, on page 17, paragraph 1, the text says, " King is very smart. he goes to school. he gets his P.h.D." I think students go to school and take P.h.D for many years is intelligent. Second, on page 21, paragraph 1, the text says, " KIng preaches at a Baptist Church. his church is always full. King's sermons give people hope." when people know how speak with a person, know how to do a person fell good, this people is very smart. In summary, this shows King is smart.
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DeleteMy friend ceila your thesis is good because you use character about MLK and evidence is good.
DeleteBased on the biograpy,MLK by terry barber the author reveals about protonist MLK breave. first,on page 27,paragraph 1,the tex says "he gets hate letters. He death theats. He gets stabbed. This means no nother for the hate letter and atabbed ". he just heep going a person like this is very breave. Second ,on page 35 paragrapy 1 ,the tex says " kings leads marches for freedon. sometimes ,the police attack the marches ". I this means ,police attack the black marches. Finally this shows kings is breave.
ReplyDeleteMy friend baptista your thesis is goog because you use character about MLK and your evidence is good
DeleteBased on the biography, Martin Luther Kink,Jr by Terry Barber , the autor reveals MLK tobe smart. First , on page 17,paragraph 1,the text says, " King is very smart." Hegoes to school ,he gets his PH.D. I think every bady go to school and get PH.D for many years is smart.Second on page 21,paragraph 1, the text says"King preachesat a Baptist church ,his church is always full. King serimons give people hope.I think when a people know to speak . Know how to do a person fell god ,this people is very smart." In summary, this shows King is smart.
ReplyDeleteMy dear Paula you have a good thesi, evidence and analysis. You have an good analysis because you have transition words for example first, next and in summary in your work, but somentimes you forget put corect period and comma. Good job
DeleteMy friend Paula Depina you have great thesis,evidence, and analysis. you have good transition words for example first,second,also. you have good quotation mark. you really clear in your analysis. you have great,great job my friend Stanley Joseph
DeleteBased on the biography,MLK by Terry Barber,the author reveal about MLK to be brave.first,on page 27 paragraph 1 it says" He gets hate letter. He gets derath threats. He gets stabbed". this mean no matter for the hate letters and the stabbed. He just keep going a person like this is very brave. second,on page 35 paragraph 1 it says" king leards marches for freedom. sometime the police attack the marches. I THINK NO MATTER FOR THE POLICE ATTACK THE MARCHES. HE JUST KEEP GOING THE MARCHES FOR FIVE DAYS A PERSON LIKE THIS IS VERY BRAVE. FINALLY THIS SHOWS KING IS BRAVE.
ReplyDeleteDear ,I agree with you because you did a great jod, I agree with your thesis, your evidence, you did a great job,I desagree with the way taped is right becuse you have 2 different letter, but you did a great jod
Deletebased on the biography MLK by Terry Barber , the auther reveals MLK to be courageous. first, on page 27 paragraph 1 it says'' he gets hate letters he gets death threats. he gats stabbed. this means I think he fought good way for the black people. second on page 29 paragraph 2 sometimes he gets to jail for taking part in these protests. this means is not afraid to go in jail to stop segregation in the south. finally ,this shows is courageous.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Dania your thesis is great. you have good transition words for example first,second, and also. your evidence is not will clear about courageous. your analysis is not really clear. first you need to use one word between (THIS MEAN AND I THINK) it's the same word. Next your second analysis is not really clear about your thesis. stanley joseph
DeleteI think the problem is the first analysis.
DeleteMiss Torii
My friend Dania your thesis is good. You have a problem in point when you finish type some words. When you put the point you need to put the capital words after the point. And your evidence is not clear.
DeleteBase on the biography,by Terry Barber, the author reveals MLK to be smart. First, on page 17, paragraph 1, the text says, ''King is very smart. He goes to school. He gets his PH.D.'' I think everyone go to school and get the PH.D. for many years is smart. Second, on page 21, paragraph 1, the text says, ''King peaches at a Baptist church. his church ia always full. People love to hear his sermons. King's sermons give peolpe hope. I think when peolpe know to speak with a person, know to do a person feel good, this people is very smart. In summary, this shows king is smart.
ReplyDeletemy friend Macda made a clear biography. you make a good thesis and evidence, he use first paragraph and second paragraph. you use quatation.
Deletemy friend Macda. you have a good evidence its clear and your thesis is good but when you have to use the quotation marks just put it dont put space on it.
DeleteBased on the biography MLK by Terry Barber , the author reveals MLK to be courageous. First on page 27 ,paragraph 1 ,the text says, ; he gets hate letters. He gets death treats. He gets stabbed. Also on page 29, paragraph 2, the text say,;sometimes he goes to jail for taking part in these protest. This mean is not afraid to go in jail to stop segragation in the south. Finally this shows king is courageous
ReplyDeletemy friend garensha I agree that there is a clear evidence and this all because there is a paragraph in which you posido this spoken
Deletemy friend Garensha your evidence is good only one thing you forget to put the quotation mark your thesis is good also good job my friend Garensha.
DeleteBased on the biography. MLK by Terry Barber the author. first on page 31 paragraph 1 the says" He dreams of better jobs for the black people" I think he fought a good way for the black people. Second on page 45 paragraph 1 The text says" he believed infreedom and equal righ" This means The people believed in King hope for the black people.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Beny your thesis is not really clear you forget to describe who is the character before you write your analysis and also don't forget to write your conclusion. Exellent work to your quotation marks and the transition words my friend.
DeleteBasad on the biography MLK by terry barber, the author reveals MLK to be brave.first,on page 27,paragraph 1,the text says,''He gets hate letters. He gets death threats .He gets stabbed This means is no matter for the hate lette and the stabbed. He just keep going a person like this is very brave next, on page 35, paragraph 1 The text says, '' king leads maches for freedom sometimes, the police attack the marches he just keep going the marches. Finally, this shows King is brave.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Kimberlie your thesis is good you have a nice conclusion.
DeleteDear, my friend Kimberlie, your thisis is good. But the author name's you need to read with capitaletter and after period you need to give space and then capitaletter again. The evidence is good too because you esplain the Martin Luther King's caracther. Next time you need to pay attetion how to teped. Good job in thisis, evidence and analysis.
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Deletebase on the biography. martin luther king jr. by terry barber the author. the evidence is page 31 paragraph 1 the text says he believed in freedom and equal rights. analysis I think he made the world a better place for all people,
ReplyDeleteMy friend Sagrario your thesis is not complete, because you did not put character about MLK. Next you need to use transition words, example, first, also... You need to put quotation marks just around the words from the text. Your evidence is not clear. Don't forget to use one space between words and 2 spaces after the period. I think you need more practice.
DeleteI agree with Ceila Garcia about the comment Sagrario, she is not really confortable to blog she needs more practice about it always use the quotation marks, the transition words and 2 spaces after the period. It's very important when you blog Sagrario know that it's the part to your grade in this class my friend.
DeleteMy friend Sagrario your thesis is not complete. first you need to use transition words. for example next,also and after. Next you not put Charater is about what. you don't have quotation mark. you don't live 2 spaces after the period. you not finish your second evidence and analysis. your evidence is not really clear my friend and you put some on page 29 and page 31. when you blog again you need to look for one page. next time you wrote very clear my friend Stanley Joseph
DeleteBase on the biography.MLK by Terry Barber the author.first on page 27 paragraph 1 the says,He gets hate letters. He gets death threats.He gets stabbed.Also on page 29, paragraph 2, the text say,;sometimes he goes to jail for taking part in these protest. This mean is not afraid to go in jail to stop segragation in the south. Finally this shows king is courageous.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Anny you thesis is good evidece and analisy,you have problems is double space afeter ponts you use transitions words for example first also your job is good.
DeleteBase on the biograph MLK by Terry Barber the author reveals MLK to be courageous. First on page 27, paragraph 1, the text says,'' He gets hate
ReplyDeleteMy friend Ioai your thesis is not complete, because you did not put character about MLK. Your evidence is not clear. Don't forget to use one space between words and 2 spaces after the period. I think you need more practice.
DeleteMy friend Loai your thesis is not complete, because you didnt make a character about MLK. Your evidence is not ok. My friend you need to come at 9:15, i can help you someone else can you because you need more pratice I hope you understand.
DeleteMy friend loai your thesis is not good because you did not finish your thesis, and your evidence is not corect.
Deletemy friend loai your thesis not right because it is not complete and does not make much sense, I had to talk about MLK,arrive early so I can help Miss Torii.
Deletemy friend your thesis is not right because it is incomplete your support for your thesis nesecita nesecita arrive early to class to help you miss torri.
Deletebased on the biography Martin Luter King Jr. by Terry barber. the author reveals M.L.K to be smart. first on page 17 paragraph 1 he goes to school he gets his PH.D. I think everyone go to school and get the PH.D for many years is smart. also on page 41 paragraph 1 the text says king works hard to make life better for blocks. i think a person for know how make better alot of people is life the person has to be really smart, and has to work hard... fynally this shows king is smart.
ReplyDeleteThere jose Luis your evedince is good, but you need to star write your thesis with caps letter,also you did not use the quotation marks.Second part your evidence is don't show us the most important if the text says MLK is smart.
DeleteYour thesis is not good Because your needs Also in thesis and quatation marks.
Deletebased on the biography.MLK by Terry Barber,the author reveal MLK to be visionary.First,on page 31,paragraph 1,the text says,"He dreams of better jobs for black people.I thing he fought a good way for black people.Next,on pege 45,paragraph 1,the text says,"He believe in freedom and equal right.I thing he made the world a better place all people.
ReplyDeletemy friend rossy disagree because you have to give more evidence, I disagree with your foretaste.
DeleteYour thesis is not good Because your needs Also in thesis and quatation marks.
DeleteMy friend Rossy, you forgot the put capital letter in the begin. you have good quotation mark. The word thing is not correct, think is correct, only in this you are cofused
DeleteMy friend Rossy your thesis is great. you have good quotation mark. you have great transition words for example first,second,also.your evidence and analysis is good for visionary. My friend you did great for everythings
DeleteBased on the biography, Matin Luther King Jr. by Terry Barber, the author reveals Martin Luther to be courageous. First, on page 27, paragra 1, the text says, " he gets hate letters. He gets death threats. He gets stabbed. This means he wasn't scared to motive the black people to marched try to stop the segregation in the South. Also, on page 29, paragraph 2, the text says, " sometimes, he goes to jail for talking part in these protests. I think Martin Luther keep going to make the black people active to protests, he believes the racism can stop in the South by protest, nonviolence. Consequently, this shows King is very courageous.
ReplyDeleteBased on the biography Martin Luther King JR by Terry Barder,the author reveal Martin Luther King's is a revolutionaire.Firts,on page"43" paragraph"6" the text says" king works hard to make life better for blacks. I think black can vote without fear.In summary,this shows king is a revolutionaire.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Charles Saint your thesis is great. you have good quotation mark. you not finist you second evidence and analysis. you have good transition words. My friend Charles Saint you have wrong page. the is that page 41 on line 6. Stanley Joseph
DeleteBased on the biography Martin Luther King Jr by Terry Barber the author reveals Martin Luther King's to be brave.
ReplyDeleteFirst on page 29, paragraph 1, the text says, " He gets hate letters. He gets death threats. He gets stabbed." I think in my country when people get death threats they quiet. But Martin Luther King Jr never stop. Also on page 33, paragraph 3, the text says, " Black people use sit-ins to protest segregation." This means All people can sit whatever they want with MLK. Finally, this shows King is brave because he fought for all black people get freedom and he had a dream.
dear sanon you thesis is good, and also you evidence is good, you use quotation mark in 2 evidence this is good.
DeleteMy friend Kimberlie yon thesis is good because you use character about MLK. And your evidence is very complete because you use transition word in your evidence.
ReplyDeleteI agreee with hans, in paragraph 2 that MLK, for help at others people, he went to the jail. But he did that because he want to finish with segregation. Also he had bad times in his life, we can not imagine how was his life, we know about him but, no too much. He was good man
ReplyDeleteMy friend macda you thesis is good you use character about MLK. and your evidence is very great
ReplyDeleteBased on the biography, Martin Luther King, by Terry Barber, the author shows MLK to be brave. First, on page 27, paragraph 1, the text says, " He gets hate letters. He gets death threats. He gets stabbed. This means no matter for the hate letters and the stabbed, he just keep going a person like this is very brave. Second, on page 41, paragraph 1, the text says, " They are angry because jobs are hard to find. They are angry because they live in slums. King works hard to make life better for blacks. I think they are poor, they didn't have food, didn't have jobs and education. Finally, this shows King is brave.
ReplyDeleteDear Indira,
DeleteYour thesis is good. Your evidence 1 and analysis 1 is also good; but the evidence 2 and analysis 2 is not really a good example of bravery. Try to find a better second evidence. Your conclusion is good. Also you used transition words like: First, Second.
Miss Torii
Based on the biography Martin Luther King JR. by Terry Barber. the author reveal Martin Luther King is visionary on page 31 paragraph 1 the texts says, "He dreams of better jobs for black people." I think he fought a good way for the black people second on page 45 paragraph 1 the text says,"He believed in freedom and equal right. He changed how people both black and white look at the world" This means the people believed in king hope for the black people. visionary. That show King have in idea for the black and white.
ReplyDeleteDear Beny,
DeleteI can see you wrote another comment. The thesis is good but the period is missing. You forgot a transition word before your evidence 1. Check your punctuation . "" etc. Re read your conclusion. How is it the same or different from other students?
Miss Torii
baseb on the biography MLK by terry Barber, the author reveals MLk to be smart.first,on page 17,paragraph 1,the text say,"He gets his ph.d.I think that people go to college from had a diploma or a ph.d. from if have a good jod.Also on page 17,paragraph 1, the text says,"king read many books.I think that people like read from learn more english or about person that write the book. finally, this shows king is smart.
ReplyDeleteDear Arley,
DeleteYour comment is good. You just need to check your typing-spelling, punctuation and spacing.
Miss Torii
based on the biography mlk by terry barber,the autohor reveals mlk to be smart .first on page 17 paragraph 1 the text says " king read many book"i belive if one personread many book and if get phd i know that person is smart because you get more knowlege. also, on page 37 paragraph 1 the text says "king wins the nobel peace prize in 1964 " this means belive if somebody wants to peace if you do anything in peace and explain about your ideas the other person is understan what you says.
ReplyDeleteBased on the biography MLK by Terry Barber, the author reveals MLK to be smart, first, on page "17", paragraphy "1", the text says, "he gets his PhD. King studies religion". I think people who had PhD is very,very smart to change the world, because you have to go to school for five years. Also, on page "21", paragraphy "1", the text says, "his church is always full. People love to hear his sermons." This means people who they like to hear what he have to say, also people is very smart,consequently, this shows King is smart.
ReplyDeleteDear Samuel,
Deletethis text is a good, but there are some Mistakes,
in your quotation mark
Based on the biography MLK by terry barbe the author revols MLK be a wise person on first one on page 21 paragrph1 the text says " king was a pastor in bastis church he preaches at sermon the poeple love him ."I thinnk MLK is wise because read lot books to leaned more.
ReplyDeleteDear Jean,
Deletei agree with your thesis. your evidence 1 is rigth,but you need check your pontuation,you need to written your 2 evidence.
i agree with your analysis 1`. but you need to finish your 2 analysis. you dont have the consequently.
based on the biography MLK,JR by terry barber,the author reveals MLK to be revolutionary.First,on page 43,paragraph 1,the text says"MLK,JR.helps to change how black people are treated all over the U.S.Black people have better jobs". i thinks people want to change such as Cabral in my country was a revolutionary.Next on page 45,paragraph 1,the text says,"he changed how people,both black and white, look at the world.He made the world a better place for all people". This means people who want to change like to Nelson Mandela in my continent "African" was a revolutionary.This shows King is revolutionary.
ReplyDeletedear jose,
Deleteyour thesis is good
your evidence is good to
I think you jus do the best you can :)
Based on the biography Martin Luther King JR. by Terry Barber. the author reveal Martin Luther King is visionary on page 31 paragraph 1 the texts says, "He dreams of better jobs for black people." I think he fought a good way for the black people second on page 45 paragraph 1 the text says,"He believed in freedom and equal right. He changed how people both black and white look at the world" This means the people believed in king hope for the black people. visionary. That show King have in idea for the black and white.
ReplyDeletemy friend cardoso i like your thisis very good man but don't used transition word and you don't give the referance obout your idea i want to tell you nest time you blog try make good one thanks man is Jean your friend........
Deletedear Manuel
Deletei agree with your thesis.
your evidencia is ok,but next time you need to work hard.
the second one is on page 29 paragraph 1, the text say" king belive in peace is the way ton change the world " I thing when some one no belive in violence is no to bad is reason isay king is awise person.
ReplyDeleteHey Mr jean i think your evidence support your thesis even tho i don't see the thesis. you have mark quotations and translation words. Good job!
DeleteBased on the biography MLK to be brave.
ReplyDeleteFirst, on page 27 the text says "Martin Luther King gets hate letters, he gets death threats and he even gets stabbed but he still kept up with the protest. I think that most people that got stabbed and received those hate letters would stop prostesting, because nobody wants to die and leave their family. Also, on page 29 paragraph 1 the text says " he goes to jail for taking part in this protest. I believe that a brave person doesn't scared of dying or locked up for their dream. This shows king is brave because he standed for his dream.
Dear Keny,
DeleteI like your thesis. I agree he was brave. But you forgat the quotation marks at the end of your evidence.
Have a good weekend.
Loai
Based on the biography Martin Lu5ther King by Terry Barber, the author reveals MLK to be courageous. First, on page 27, paragraph 7, the text says, "He gets stabbed. He gets hate letters. He gets death threats." This means he wasnt scared about what the people said. He did not stop fighting for an end to segregation in the South. Next on page 29, paragraph 1, the text says, "Sometimes he goes to jail for taking part in thoae prosts." This mens is not ofnaid to go to jail to stop segnegation in the south. Finally, this shows King is courageous.
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ReplyDeleteBased on the biography, Martin Luther King, by Terry Barber, the author shows MLK to be visionary. first, on page 31, paragraph 1, the text says, " He dreams of better jobs for black people". I think he fought a good way for black people. Second, on page 45, paragraph 1, the text says. "He believed in freedom and equal right. He change how people, both black and white look at the world". This mean the people believed in king, that was good idea that work together black and white people, and that children to go to school together.
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