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Sunday, December 2, 2012
"America" from West Side Story
Based on the song "America" from West Side Story, do all immigrants have the same perspective about living in the United States? Provide specific and relevant evidence for you claim. Please be sure to:
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Based on the song "America" from west side story, do all immigrants don't have same perspective about living United States. First, on lines 19 to 21 in "America", Anita says, "Every one there will have moved here" This means I think every one who lives in anothes" Next, on lines 13 to 15 in the song, Rosalives states, "she side I'll give them new washing mvachune". This means I think Rosalives like her conutry. She want to give them washing machine. Finally, this shows all immigrants don't have the peopl ctive about living in America.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Loai, your thesis is great, but the line you tell us is not 19 the line everyone there will have moved here is line 47.
Deletefriend Loai, is pretty sure that where you get your evidence and put right the line is.
DeleteMy friend Loai you have good thesis but you evidence is not good because you use line wrong this line corecte is 47 not 19 also you conclusion is not clear you have good quotations words. good job. Nex time not forgete. Byeeeeee
DeleteDear Loai your thesis have some mistake in the verb. The first verb "do"pass to the second verd. Do you changed but do you keeped do in the same space. Then some word is not correct and the first evidence and analyse is not good
Deletemy friend loai you need the summary o cloclusion in the socratic seminar.
DeleteThanks you my firneds samuel, Anny, Jose, Indira and Sagrario to help improve your first draft. Next i will make all of you happy. Loai Alsoni.
DeleteBase on the song "America" from west side story,do all immigrants have the same perspective about living in the United States. Fist, on lines 1 to 4 in "America",from west side story Rosalia says,"like Rosalia said Puerto Rico you lovely island always the pineapples growing always the coffee blossoms blowing." I think she mussed her country she miss her native like coffee, pineapples and weather. Second on line 6 to 9 in the song," America" from west side story throug San Juan. I think it doesn't matter if two people sleep and same noun because me and my sister sleep in the each room. Summary, are dont't have the same opinion.
ReplyDeleteMy friend your thesis is not really clearly my friend. your second evedence is not really really clearly my friend. you have good transition words and good quotation mark my friend. Stanley Joseph
DeleteThanks my friend Stanley, for your advice and also for telling me that I have sea and wing once tell me I have my transition well.
DeleteDear Anny your thesis is not good because you keep the verb do. Do you need to moved to the second verb to "do not have, but do you have good evidence
DeleteMy friend Anny your thesis is not clear, you need to use, quotation marcks, you need to use capital letters, you have good analysis.Good job. byeeeeeeee.... not forgete nex time.
Deletemy friend anny you thesis is not clear. next time no forgete quatation marcks ok good job my friend anny
DeleteMy friend Anny, your thesis is not good. You need to use the (")quatation marcks. make sure you write the words correctly. good job for your efforts.
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DeleteThank you my friends Stenley, Indira, Sagrario, Baptista, Sanon required by you guys comment on my work and have said what is wrong.
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants do not have the same prespective about living in the United States. First on line 23 in "America" , Anita says, "Hundreds of people in each room!" I think no matter if people have home to sleep in the same bed, in general life is more confortable in United States. Also, on line 39 in the song, Rosalia states, "I'll bring a TV to San Juan. This means no matter if the people move here but Rosalia lovely the capital San Juan. Finally, this shows all immigrants do not have like the same perspective.
ReplyDeletemy friend your thesis is very good and quotation mark.
DeleteHallo my friend Indira you did a good thesis, you need put comma after transition words, and choose the best evidence, but you did a good job, keep work hard good job.
DeleteThank you my friends Rossy and Ceila. Thank you again ceila because you tell me what is the mistake and next time i improve it.
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ReplyDeleteMy friend Macda your thesis is good but you not put comma after West Side Story. you need to put quotation mark in the begging and end the sentence. you need to states the words clearly for example full bloom. you have a good conclusion and good transition words my friend. Stanley Joseph
DeleteDear Macda do you have a good thesis, evidence, analyse and conclution but sametime you skip the comma. Next time you need to work in comma. Good job
DeleteBased on the song "America", from westside story all immigrants do not have the same perspective about living in America. First, on lines 19 to 21 in "Ameica" , Anita says, "Everyone there will have moved here." This mean everybody who lives in another country would like to live in America. Also on lines 36 to 38 in the song, Rosalia state, "She said I will give them a new washing machine." This means Rosalia like her country she want to go in her country to them people a washing machine. Finally, this shows all immigrants do have the same propective about living in America.
ReplyDeleteHi my friend Garensha do you have a good thesis, but you need to do space in "west side" and good evidence and analyse, but in conclusion is not good because the conclusion is the same with the thesis. In thesis you said all the immigrants do not the same perspective and in the conclusion you said all the immigrants do have the same perspective.
Deletebased on song'' America'' From west side story, do all immigrants do not have same perspective about living in the Unated States. Fiirst, on lines 1 to 5 in ''America'', Rosalia says,'' Puerto Rico, you lovely island.... island of tropical breezes always the coffee blossom blowing.'' I think she love her Country and she miss her nature the plants. Next, on lines 6 to 15 in the song, Anita states,'' Puerto Rico... You ugly, island.... I like the island Manhattan. Smoke on your pipe and put that in.'' I think she do not like puerto Rico, she talk bad about puerto Rico, she like America, she want story here, because she thing America is the best. In simmary, this shows all immigrants, do not have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Dania your thesis is not really clear. you need to write clearly the word first. you have good quotation mark. you have a good conclusion. you to put 2 space when you have period my friend. Stanley Joseph
Deletethank you Slanley for the comment, next time I make a clear thesis and I put double space after the period.
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ReplyDeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants do not have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 7 to 10 in "America", Anita says, "You ugly island... Island of tropic diseases, Always the hurricanes blowing, always the population growing"... I think she do not love Island because the weather, everyday the rain falls and many diseases, she think the America is the best. Second, on lines 1 to 5 in the song, Rosalia states, "Puerto Rico, you lovely island... Island of tropical breezes. Always the pineapples growing, always the coffee blossoms blowing"... This means she love her contry because she missing the nature. when I finsh my college, Im go my country too. Finally, this shows all immigrants do not have the same mentality
ReplyDeleteMy dear friend Mary you did a good job but some words is spell wrong, but your thesis, evidence, analysis and conclusion is good. Good job
DeleteThank you my dear Ceila for correct my work. Now I'm go correct my words. :)
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants do not have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 1 to 5 in "America", Rosalia says, "Puerto Rico, you lovely island... Island of tropical breezes. Always the pineapples growing, always the coffee blossoms blowing... I think she love her country and love her nature she want to go back. Also,when I finished my school in United States, I want to go back to my country. Second, on lines 6, 7 and 14 in the song, Anita states, "Puerto Rico... You ugly island... I like the island Manhattan. this means she do not love Puerto Rico, she like America, she want stay in America she believe America is the best country. Finally, this shows all immigrants do not have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Ceila you did a good job your thesis and your evidence is good to you have a good conclusion
DeleteMy friend ceila you have good thesis and you good evedence you date good job my friend
DeleteBased, in the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants dont have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on line 23 in "America", Anita says, "Hundreds of people in each room." This means many countries most people sllep together in each room, in United Stetes is more confortable, everybody have only bedroom for to sleep, in America doesent matter to sleep in same bed. Also, on line 30 in the song, Rosalia states, "Ill give my cousins a free ride." I think in America she has opportunity for many things, for help her family and friend. she like America ,but in here she make money for buy every things you need.In fanilly, this shows all immigrants dont have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteHi my friend paula do you have a good thesis, evidence, analyse and conclusion. do you use good transation word and quotation marks.
DeleteMy dear Paula, you have good thesis, evidence and analysis. But you need put good transition words. Good job
DeleteMy friend Paula wonderfull job.
DeleteThanks, my friend Indira, May Furtado and Sejo, your comment help me to leaned how to do a good job.
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ReplyDeleteBased on the song America from west side story,all immigrants do not have the same perspective about living in unite states. first, on lines 6 to 7 in America, Anita says, "Puerto Rico you ugly island" I think Anita come to America when she was a baby, and she forgot somethings from Puerto Rico,or maybe all her family live in America. second, on lines 3 to 5 in the song Rosalia states,"island of tropical breezes,always the pineapples growing, always the coffee blossoms growing" this means Rosalia love her city of San Juan because she remember everything from her city, Example: she tell always the pineapples growing, always the coffee blossom growing. this things can be somethings that she can not see in America. this lines reminds me when i was in my country i was thinking about how the things are different in America and in my country. finally, this shows all immigrants do not have the same opinion.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Jose Luis portillo you need to use same words for example: Guotation marcks transitions words capital letters afeter peer not forgete nex time my friend..byeee
Deleteok mi friend thank you for your commet, and i am going to change a few things in my work, and this can help me to learn new things..
DeleteBased on the song "America" from west side story, don't have the same perspective about living in the united states. First, on lines 19 to 21 in "America", Anita says, "Every one there will have moved here" This means every one who lives in another" Next, on lines 35 to 39 in the song,Rosalia states, " she said I'll give them new washingh machine." This means Rosalia like her country because she want her country to be U.S. Finally this shows all immigrants don't have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteHi my friend the title "west Side Store" are all capitalete but you have a good thesis.
Deletethank you my friend indira for help me better in the capitalete...
DeleteBased on the song "America" From West Side Story all immigrants do not have same perspective about living in the United States. First, on line 22 in "America", Rozalia says, "Hundreds of people in each roon". This means i have a connection to do my contry. My contry sometimes have une roon for two peoples in United States have une roon for people. Nex, on line, 3 to 5 in the song, Rosalia states, "Island of tropical breezes. Always the pianepples growing, alwys the coffe blossons blowing." This means i have a connection to do, meny people like Cabo Verde because have sun everything coffe strongly in United States have snow, cold coffe is not good different cultures. Finally, this shows all immigrants don't have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteHey Baptista you have a good thesis and evidence, you just need to put clearly your analysis,ask someone in Miss Torii's ESL class to help you,congratulation.
DeleteHi my friend Paula thank you, you commented my my job next time I put my analysis more clear. I talk Mss Torii to relp me.. Thanks.
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants do not have the same perspective about living in the lenited srotes first, on lines 1 to 5 in "America", resalia says, "Puerto rico you lovely is land is land of tropical breezer. Always sthe caffee blassans blowing ." I think she lave her country because ohe miss the nature when I finislied my school I want go la my country Next , on lines 6 to 15 in the song, Anita states, "puerto rico you ugly sland I like the sland manhaltan smoke on your pipe and put that in I think she do not like puerto rico she tolk bool about Puerto rico she like America she want story here because she thing Finally do not have the same meitality.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Kimberlie you thesis is not clear, you need to use quotation marcks, transitions words good job nex time not forgete. Bye
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DeleteThanks you my friend Baptista to tell me about quotation marks.
DeleteBased on the song *America* from West Side Story, all immigrant do not have the same perspective about living in United States. Frist, on line 2 to 3 in *America*, Rosalia states, *You lovely island, Island of tropical breezes.* I think Rosalia liked her own Country, I agree with her because I love my Country so much for the tropical season on June in Boston is cold in my County Haiti is cool. Next, on line 8 to 9 in the song, Anita say, *Island of tropic diseases, always the hurricanes blowing.* This means She does miss her own nature, I disagree with her because she does liked her own Country. Finally, this shows do not have same opinion.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Stanley you have a good thesis and evidence but your analysis 1 and 2 have some confusion you need to be specific about your evidence 1 and 2 to have clearly a great analysis. Think more about what you write my friend next time, I believe you will have a great comment my classmate. Good job :) !!!!
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My friend Stanley you have good thesis and evidence, but your analysis 2 is not clear. You not put good quatation marks. Good job :)
DeleteThank you my friend Hans and Maribelly to help me to improve my first draft. At second time I make all of you happy about your comment. My friend. Stanley Joseph
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants don't have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 1 to 3 in "America" , Rosalia says, "Puerto Rico, You lovely island... Island of tropical breezes." This means she loves her country, she doesn't like to live in America because everything is different for her. She miss her nature and also I examine she has probably an idea to go back in Puerto Rico. I have a text to world when Rosalia affirm Puerto Rico , you lovely island... Island of tropical breezes. When my sister came in the United States she saids, Haiti, you lovely Country... Country has a very good freshness. Next, on lines 6 to 8 in the song, Anita states, "Puerto Rico... you ugly island of tropic deseases." I think this character shows how much she loves Amrica, the nature of America it's not a problem for her. She prefer to live in America than Puerto Rico, she really said too much negative things about Puerto Rico. In conclusion, this shows all immigrants don't have the same mentality about living in the United States.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Hans you have a good thesis and Evidence your conclusion is clear.
DeleteMy friend Hans i like you job because you have good transitions words, quatations marcks you conclusion is very really. Thxx my friend
DeleteMy friend Hans you do a good job and you give a nice evidence and conclusion word, its very very good my friend God bless you.
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ReplyDeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants don't have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 1 to 3 in "America" , Rosalia says, "Puerto Rico, You lovely island.. Island of tropical breezes." I think that someone that love and miss her country must think their country is the best. Next, on line 6 to 9, Anita ststes,"Puerto Rico...Your ungly island...Island of tropic diseases" this remind me of my country, Anita hate her country and like the life in American , the people in my country think that American is good ,and can bring their wealth. They eager to caome here. Consequently, this shows all immigrants have different perspective about living in American.
ReplyDeleteDear Shuzhen you have a good evidence and analysis too.
DeleteBased on the song "America" West Side Story, do all immigrants don't have the same prespective about living in the United Stated.First, on lines 1 to 3 in "America" Rosalia says, "Puerto rico, you lovely island...island of tropical breezers." This means Rosalia love her own country, she does'nt like living in the united stateds. Also on lines 4 to 5 in the song, Rosalia states, "Always the pineapples growing, always the coffe blossoms blowing." I think she miss her country a lot and she miss the pineapples on her country.Finally, this show all immigrantes don'y have the same mentality.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Samuel your thesis it's not good you suppose to re-word the question to form a thesis, know that if your thesis is wrong you can not have a best evidence and also a great analysis. If you need help my friend about the thesis and other thing I can help you ok. You do well in comment about "America" West Side Story. Congrats!!!!
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hey my friend Samuel, yuor thesis is not good because you need to reword the pront to write a good thesis, and after period you want to use doblue space for you make a good job.
DeleteHans Peterson Oville and Paula Depina Thanks for you gays Reply my blog I will fix next time to do a better job.
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrant do not have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 23 in "America" Anita says, " Hundreds of people in each room!" This means when I was in Haiti a lot of people stay in a small appartment. Next, on lines 18 to 19 in the song, West Side states, " Everything free in America, For a small fee in America!" I think if if you respect everybody all the door will be open for you. You do not want troube with your friends. In summary, thyis shows all immigrant help this country work and make morney.
ReplyDeleteDear Sanon you did a good job i have something to explain you write something try to read after some in your word you wrote repeat 2 times n you capitalition after a point after a quotation marke, for a name not for this , but anyway you do a good job.
DeleteMy friend good job I hope you still keep the.
DeleteMy friend good job,keep on...
DeleteThank you my friends for telling me that. Next time I will improve my whiting Thank you more friends who replied to me.
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrant don't have the same perspective about living in the Unate State. First, on line 7 in "America",Anita says, "You ugly island". I think that Anita like more living in U.S because there good job and there beautiful place maybe Anita like more the English. second, on line 18 in the song,the newpaper state,"Everything free in America". I belive that all people go to the U.S bacuase aoll is free,But in thr country where they living don't there free. Finally, this shows all immigrants don't have the same perspective.
ReplyDeleteBased on the song "America" West side story all immigrant people do not have the same perspective or opionion. First, on line 6 to 8 Anita says,"Puerto Rico,you ugly island, island of tropic diseases" I think some people do not like their country like if in their country too much hot or cold they do not like them country.I have connection to world. in my city when summar time too much hot so,some people do not like the weather.Next, on line 1 to 3 Rosalia states,"Puerto Rico, you lovely island,island of tropical breezes" This means The immigrant miss their country, culture and wealther. They miss everything.I have connection to my life because I miss everything in my country and I like my country nature like weather so, I miss the weather too. In summary, all people is different opinon in live in United State.
ReplyDeleteMy friend Leyla your thesis is not clear next time you suppose use 2 space after period in then 1 space for the comme.
Deletehi Dania thank you suggestion but my thesis is the the other student any ways thank you and i will try next time to be better.
Deletesorry for my speling
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Story, do all immigrants have the same perspective about living in the united states? Frist,on line 22 to 23 in "America" West Side Story says, "Hundresds of flowers in full bloom. This means If,I have agarden I plant flowers on it. Aloso on line 1 to 5 in the song west Side Story says, "puerto Rico lovely Island tropical breezen Always the pineaples growink the caffee blossoms blowing. Ithink I have are friend when Iwas in Haiti a have are friend told me he dont whant to came in unitedn states. In summary, this shows all immigrants I think if you respect Every boby.
ReplyDeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrant do not have the same perspective about living in the United States. Frist on lines 1 to 5 in "America", Rosalia says "Puerto Rico you lovely Island. Island of tropical breezes. Always the pineaples growing, always the coffee blossons blowing".This means Rosalia like Puerto Rico better then America. Next, on lines 22 in the song "Rosalia" states "Hundreds of flowers in full bloom". I think If you want to make a good garden in America you cant. Finally this shows all immigrant do not have the same ideas about living in the United State.
ReplyDeleteMy cuz:Charlessaint good thesis,some problem on quotation marks,evidence brillant,your conclusion is right,but i believe you can do better for next... thanks.
DeleteThanks Mr. Sejo but I got my quotation marks you suppose to look again.
DeleteMy friend Charlessaint your thesis is good but you have a problem about comma for example after your use quotetion marke you need to put comma for example first, socond, next, and also, you have a good conclusion
ReplyDeleteThanks my friend I do it next time.
DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story,do all immigrant have the same perspective about living in the United States. First,on lines 29 to 30 in "America", Rosalia says,"I'll give my cousins a free ride." I think Rosalia like to liveon her own Country and to stay with his family. Next, on lines 2 to 5 in the song, Rosalia states, " Island of tropical breezes." This means, she miss her Country and her nature like coffe and pineapples and her water.Finally, this show all immigrants do not have the same opinion.
ReplyDeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants don't have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 1 to 3 in "America" , Rosalia says, "Puerto Rico, You lovely island... Island of tropical breezes." I think Rosalia miss her country, everything is different for her and difficult. next, on lines, 8 to 9, in song Anita says, "island to tropic diseases, always the hurricanes blowing. This mean in Puerto Rico, there are many diseases and and many hurricanes. In conclusion, this shows all immigrants don't have the same idea about living in the United States.
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Based on the song "America" from west side story,do all immigrants have the same perpective about living in the U.S.A. first on line 1 to 5 in "America",from westside story says,like rosalia said Puerto Rico you lovely islan always the pineapples growing aways the coffe blossoms blowing. this means she mussed hey country she miss her native like coffe pineapples and weather. next,on line 6 to 9 in the song "American" from westside story states, like Rosalia said hundreds of flowers in foll bloow I ll drive a buick throung San Juan. I think tl doesnt matter if 2 people sleep and same now because me and my sister sleep in the same each room. in summary are dont have the same opinion.
ReplyDeletemy friend Sagrario nice thesis,but on your evidence and analysi need more specific idea,also some problem on quotation marks,i like your summary,continue... .be good
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DeleteBased on the song "America" from West Side Story, all immigrants don't have the same perspective about living in the United States. First, on lines 1 to 3 in "America" , Rosalia says, "Puerto Rico, You lovely island.. Island of tropical breezes." I think that someone that love and miss her country must think their country is the best. Next, on line 6 to 9, Anita ststes,"Puerto Rico...Your ungly island...Island of tropic diseases" this remind me of my country, Anita hate her country and like the life in American , the people in my country think that American is good ,and can bring their wealth. They eager to caome here. Consequently, this shows all immigrants have different perspective about living in American.
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